Sundown dazzling day Gold through my eyes But my eyes turned within Only see Starless and Bible black Old friend charity Cruel twisted smile And the smile signals emptiness For me Starless and Bible black Ice blue silver sky Fades into grey To a grey hope that all yearns To be Starless and Bible black
I like the concept of elevating low nukige culture into something beautiful and ethereal. It's humanistic. You could push it more though - relate more to the theme of hopelessness and self deprecation. I like that you were trying to use color as a motif (it's bible BLACK after all) but again, it could have been more explicit and conceptual. Good one mate.
Gold through my eyes
But my eyes turned within
Only see
Starless and
Bible black
Old friend charity
Cruel twisted smile
And the smile signals emptiness
For me
Starless and
Bible black
Ice blue silver sky
Fades into grey
To a grey hope that all yearns
To be
Starless and
Bible black